Rage Against The Page

It was raining. The rain dripped from the palm trees. Water stood in pools on the gravel paths. The sea broke in a long line in the rain and slipped back down the beach to come up and break again in a long line in the rain. Let's scriptify Hemmingway . Beach - Day RAIN. Dripping from the palm trees. Water stands in pools on the gravel paths. The sea breaks in a long line in the rain and slips back down the beach to come up and break again in a long line in the rain. Hell yes. Subject, verb (five strong ones), object. At least three distinct, vivid shots suggested. Look at the lengthening sentences. There's your shot pacing. And a final sentence that unfolds exactly like the action it describes.